amateur songwriting
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Hi, this is one of my first attempts at this sort of thing, anyone can comment a bit? And try not to laugh...thanks!
you can listen to the mp3 at : http://www.bitlounge.com/jjoosshh
lyrics :
jjoosshh
So You've Left Me
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I still remember
what drew me to you
how we met and
what you wore
and so you've left
and so it's over
but who is really wanting more
and she said, how long could it last?
and I reply should be fun as long as it does
as it does, and yes
so you've left me
I'll find someone else
so you've left me
what about it?
I still get by
I'm not too co-dependent
but I miss you
and I've learnt
I don't have a point
and I'm sober besides
it's not what I wanted
so why should I decide
and she said, how long could it last?
I reply should be fun as long as it does
it wouldn't last
and so you've left me
I'll find someone else
so you've left me
anyone can do that
you can't feel lust for me no more
can't even feel lust for me no more
so you've left me
so you have -
good effort dude, but if u sing properly and more details like solo included in is better.
By the way, the first part another person is joining your voice damn perfectly at the chorus part.
i think if this song is to be sang in an extremely rock style using higher key is more marketing.
hehe i think maybe this song is for yourself for your own feeling. SO not bad at all.
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actually, the other person is me also..it's a vocal overlay. heh.
yeah...the vocals are rather bad, especially the part where I *crack*. The day I recorded it I was auditioning for some band...I was singing the whole day before I recorded it...at the guys house. so my voice sounded like shit man...really. and i'm going for vocal lessons today!
" think if this song is to be sang in an extremely rock style using higher key is more marketing."
definitely...I was trying different chords for it...and I found that a higher key worked better. Now that I've got sb live card in my comp..I think I can probably distort my acoustic guitar for a more electric sound...hmm.
solo ar...I can't write solos. Can write for me ar? hehe
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Haha i didn't know the vocal is your own voice.
Si1 li3 le4
I write solo for you ar? dun joke lah haha i only know how to play only, got no creativity of composing anything. But listen to your song feel wasted loh, becoz u like dun put in full effort like this.
happy composing
Music skill is a lifetime skill~~~~~~~
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Hah? what's that chinese word mean? despite my nick...I can't speak chinese.
Yeah...didn't really put full effort. That's why I must rerecord it soon..with better effects. This is kind of a demo... -
The chinese word ar, in english my english also beri poor. ermm, its like pardon me i dunno that vocal is your own voices. hehe something like that lah.
Wish u put in full effort and then i down load and listen again hehe.
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hey sorry but i can't get the song from that webpage.. maybe you can tell me how else i can get it from? thanks
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i never knew i had a dream until that dream was you, and when i look into your eyes the sky's a different blue