8 words poetry
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This is a game where a user of this forum gives out 8 completely random words (or 10 for advanced) and the rest of the members try to compose a poem, (making sure the poem includes all 8 words), that actually makes sense... Anyone up for the challenge?
Okay, the first word list:
1- Crumble
2- Dismay
3- Dolphin
4- Flaw
5- Mirage
6- Reality
7- Silver
8- Wreck
This should be pretty interesting...[/i] -
i dunno how poetic this is gonna be.. but here goes..
Silver came home in a wreck
and needed a reality check.
She crumbled onto her couch
and in dismay she slouched.
That night she dreamt of a desert
walking while eating dessert.
And saw a mirage of a dolphin
with baruku hanging off it's fin!
my goodness that's a load of crap!~~ -
Originally posted by jOhO:
i dunno how poetic this is gonna be.. but here goes..
[b]Silver came home in a wreck
and needed a reality check.
She crumbled onto her couch
and in dismay she slouched.
That night she dreamt of a desert
walking while eating dessert.
And saw a mirage of a dolphin
with baruku hanging off it's fin!
my goodness that's a load of crap!~~ [/b]
That's so funny (ps... you missed the word 'flaw') 
And considering it rhymes, that's good!
Now my own work (composed it during my first lecture... not good, but that's not the point...)
[/quote]
Silver perfection crumbled in dismay,
like the effects of a mirage on a sunny day.
She realized a flaw in her reality,
As she awakened from her realm...
She yearns for the easy popularity of dolphins,
Yet in her pursuit She became a predator,
A ruler of the wrecks in the sea.
and my life is but a mirror of her dreams...
[/quote]
I wonder what others would come up with... -
while mines the crappy type, urs in nice and artisticOriginally posted by En':I wonder what others would come up with... 
i'm not sure if others will come up with anything.. i was bored shitless so i decided to give it a go.. something to keep myself awake for 10 mins.. -
I like yours, It's very humorous sides the point of the game is to stimulate creativity... 10 min? You made me feel so bad, I spent half of the first lecture writing mine...
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looks like nobody has been as bored as us to even bother to try ehhe..
btw.. how did u come up with those 8 words? just from thin air? -
From dictionary...Originally posted by jOhO:looks like nobody has been as bored as us to even bother to try ehhe..
btw.. how did u come up with those 8 words? just from thin air?
If you can, do another 8 words? And lemme try at them tonight...
Haiz~ I gotta sch now... Good Morn~! -
i suddenly remember this thread! no business here eh en?
i too, forgot to get 8 words for you.
ok let's see.. no need dictionary:
profound
spectrum
tangible
wise
elementary
swan
hide
shimmer -
you want to kill me ar?Originally posted by jOhO:i suddenly remember this thread! no business here eh en?
i too, forgot to get 8 words for you.
ok let's see.. no need dictionary:
profound
spectrum
tangible
wise
elementary
swan
hide
shimmer
give you one by tonight... -
one by one? ehheheOriginally posted by En':you want to kill me ar?
give you one by tonight...
take ur time lar.. i also anyhow come up with the words one... had a couple of minutes to think of wat i could come up with myself.. and promptly gave up!! ahhahah
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This is one challenge I'm gonna takeOriginally posted by jOhO:one by one? ehhehe
take ur time lar.. i also anyhow come up with the words one... had a couple of minutes to think of wat i could come up with myself.. and promptly gave up!! ahhahah
mwahahaha
anyway, point is not to make good poetry mah, is to exercise creativity...
lemme get started later... first... coffee... and air-con... -
ok this is wat i came up with:
The wise do not forsake
their elementary beginnings,
wherefrom a spectrum
of profound phylosophies emerge.
Like the ugly duckling
that grows to beautiful swan,
it's feathers shimmering at dusk,
the tangible aspects of life
are sometimes rendered meaningless
at this miraculous transformation.
my problem is that the second verse doesn't really tie in with the first. almost like two different poems plugged together. argh~@!
i guess the ugly duckling could be the elementary beginning and the swan could personify the wise.
arrr.. cannot make it!
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FacadeOriginally posted by jOhO:profound
spectrum
tangible
wise
elementary
swan
hide
shimmer
I ran through the emotional spectrum
when I realised that life was just a beggar's feast.
nothing but a mere facade,
not everything have to be tangible to exist.
the most elementary,
most basic truths.
To judge a book by it's cover,
marks one as a fool...
Everything is different under it's apperance,
like the hidden wisdom of the swan,
understand that, and a shimmer of understanding,
from profound knowledge will be born...
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terrible, but I tried my best...
oh well *~*
Thankx joho, u really stretched my brains to it's limit... -
hey it's anything but terrible! u obviously gave those words more thought than i did!Originally posted by En':terrible, but I tried my best...
oh well *~*
Thankx joho, u really stretched my brains to it's limit...
well, i guess it was good exercise for the brain eh? well done!! -
Originally posted by jOhO:
I think if you can add a third verse, should be able to tie the first two quite nicely leh (me 2 cents worth...)
ok this is wat i came up with:
[b]The wise do not forsake
their elementary beginnings,
wherefrom a spectrum
of profound phylosophies emerge.
Like the ugly duckling
that grows to beautiful swan,
it's feathers shimmering at dusk,
the tangible aspects of life
are sometimes rendered meaningless
at this miraculous transformation.
my problem is that the second verse doesn't really tie in with the first. almost like two different poems plugged together. argh~@!
i guess the ugly duckling could be the elementary beginning and the swan could personify the wise.
arrr.. cannot make it! [/b]
*ahem, you forgot the word, hide
though I think the duckling symbolising the beginning and the swan symbolising the evolved, actually made quite a lot of sense... (to me lar...) -
well, I did have more practise...Originally posted by jOhO:hey it's anything but terrible! u obviously gave those words more thought than i did!
well, i guess it was good exercise for the brain eh? well done!!
(at a long ago forum...)
yeah... is good exercise, though I think only you are crazy enough to go along with me... (is a GOOD thing... show's that I'm not the only insane one around...) -
Originally posted by En':
u know wat, as a graphic designer my attential to detail sux ass!! arghh.. i did it again, forgot a word.
I think if you can add a third verse, should be able to tie the first two quite nicely leh (me 2 cents worth...)
*ahem, you forgot the word, [b]hide
though I think the duckling symbolising the beginning and the swan symbolising the evolved, actually made quite a lot of sense... (to me lar...)[/b]
okok i'm gonna complete this one this time. always ban tu er fei. gimme some time, while u go read the stories. erm that is if u're not tired yet. -
after torturing my brain?Originally posted by jOhO:u know wat, as a graphic designer my attential to detail sux ass!! arghh.. i did it again, forgot a word.
okok i'm gonna complete this one this time. always ban tu er fei. gimme some time, while u go read the stories. erm that is if u're not tired yet.
I think it's actually rather awake (and active) now...
(and headache... *~* )
waiting for ur complete work...
Jia you! (for once, I finish faster... mwahahaha) -
ok i'm done.. the first verse still doesn't really lead into the second and third if u ask me. but the third verse came out rather nicely i reckon, and pessimistically too!!Originally posted by En':after torturing my brain?
I think it's actually rather awake (and active) now...
(and headache... *~* )
waiting for ur complete work...Jia you! (for once, I finish faster... mwahahaha)
The wise do not forsake
their elementary beginnings,
wherefrom a spectrum
of profound phylosophies emerge.
Like the ugly duckling
that grows to beautiful swan,
it's feathers shimmering at dusk,
the tangible aspects of life
are sometimes rendered meaningless
by this miraculous transformation.
Beauty, this swan personifies,
admiration abounds in the countryfolk.
The swan, however, will forever hide,
the scars it amassed as a duckling,
when not a single head it turned,
nor a single extolment received. -
Originally posted by jOhO:
cool, and all 8 words, yeay!
ok i'm done.. the first verse still doesn't really lead into the second and third if u ask me. but the third verse came out rather nicely i reckon, and pessimistically too!!
[b]The wise do not forsake
their elementary beginnings,
wherefrom a spectrum
of profound phylosophies emerge.
Like the ugly duckling
that grows to beautiful swan,
it's feathers shimmering at dusk,
the tangible aspects of life
are sometimes rendered meaningless
by this miraculous transformation.
Beauty, this swan personifies,
admiration abounds in the countryfolk.
The swan, however, will forever hide,
the scars it amassed as a duckling,
when not a single head it turned,
nor a single extolment received.[/b]
(yes I counted, and triple-checked...)
perhaps if u try making it so that the swan embraces rather than trying to hide it's scar, it would tie in the first para...? well, won't know until it's tried... *~*
you think got anyone else (other than us) insane enough to try ur list? -
AD is the only one i can think of. he's not called "the crazy poet" for nothing!Originally posted by En':cool, and all 8 words, yeay!
(yes I counted, and triple-checked...)
perhaps if u try making it so that the swan embraces rather than trying to hide it's scar, it would tie in the first para...? well, won't know until it's tried... *~*
you think got anyone else (other than us) insane enough to try ur list?
who else ... hmm.
i'm thinking i could scrap the whole first verse and re-write it.. let it lead into the second and third, rather than forcing the first verse to stay as is, and the second and third trying to link to it. -
until someone comes up with the next 8 words, it's still considered openOriginally posted by jOhO:AD is the only one i can think of. he's not called "the crazy poet" for nothing!
who else ... hmm.
i'm thinking i could scrap the whole first verse and re-write it.. let it lead into the second and third, rather than forcing the first verse to stay as is, and the second and third trying to link to it.
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eheh cool... let's see if AD notices this then! *pressure on AD*Originally posted by En':until someone comes up with the next 8 words, it's still considered open -
i think u already got the poem and just take the words out only..Originally posted by En':I wonder what others would come up with... -
unfortunately, you thought wrong...Originally posted by De|usi0n:i think u already got the poem and just take the words out only..
wanna give it a try?
joho's list also killed me...
I think you shld be able to make some sense out of it...
waiting for ur 'entry' (for lack of a better word)